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| − | Well, the research and history section is not exactly objective...
| + | Nunja, besonders objektiv ist der Abschnitt Forschung und Historie ja nicht gerade... |
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| − | No, probably comes from an advertising brochure...
| + | Nee, stammt wohl aus einem Werbeprospekt... |
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| − | == May 2016 again somewhat objectified == | + | == Mai 2016 nochmal etwas versachlicht == |
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| − | Let's see if the Onkyo freaks can stand this now no longer 1:1 from the page gardi.de page.
| + | Schaun wir mal, ob die Onkyo-Freaks diese jetzt nicht mehr 1:1 von der Seite gardi.de-Seite stammende Variante ertragen können. |
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| − | Kind regards, Analoghatwas
| + | Freundliche Grüße, Ansloghatwas |
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| − | : Dear Charly, today (June 8, 2018) you have added here again promotional textual passages. Here it concerns however a wiki, compare that calmly times with the Wikipedia. Some of it I've clarified, some passages would have to be worded more factually again. Since I would like no Edit was, now here this reference. It would be best if you could adjust the flowery passages yourself.
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| − | :" ''Hardly any other manufacturer in the HiFi industry can show a development like Onkyo. ''" Could you please justify this factually? I would delete this sentence, because in my opinion the deeper content is missing.
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| − | Or " ''In addition to new innovative products'': what are they?
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| − | : "''exclusive technical concepts'':" Are the concepts mentioned really 'exclusive'? Does no competitor have anything comparable and is thus also far behind Onkyo, especially in terms of sound quality?
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| − | I would also like to question the section on contemporary history: does it really matter in which year which national company was founded? Surely that can be presented in a more compact way . . .
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| − | : History section in a nutshell: ''regain its reputation as a .... regain'', how does that work?, or some ''extremely competent audio components'': when is an audio component ''extremely competent''??
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| − | : Very much hope for your understanding or info here on the discussion page. MfG--[[User:Analoghatwas|Analoghatwas]] ([[User Discussion:Analoghatwas|Discussion]]) 20:00, 8 Jun 2018 (CEST)
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